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Watch today’s re-write, and check out the before and after emails below.
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Subject: Measure Employee Feedback
Hi Will,
I noticed you’re an HR manager at XYZ company. As part of the Human Resource team, one of the significant challenges is to create an engaged workforce to build a great culture.
We at my company helped leaders like you to measure and improve workplace culture.Is this something that you would like to achieve at XYZ company?
Will’s Rewrite
Subject: Culture Read
Kristina,
Talking with HR leaders with fast growing teams, getting a read on the organization tends to be top priority.
As you’ve grown, have you found this to be a challenge?
Kristina’s Rewrite
Subject: employee happiness
Will,
In chatting with other HR leaders, two of the problems they’re experiencing are:
1 – measuring employee engagement
2 – turning employee feedback into action plans
We’re helping companies (like X and Y) strengthen the culture through acknowledging employee feedback and taking action.
Curious if you struggle with the same – open to a quick chat?
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